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It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media-rich society

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In
this
 contemporary era, it is irrefutable that
media
 has dominated the current scenario. It is becoming more and more complex to escape the influence of the
media
 on our survival. I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages in detail and will elaborate
them
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 in upcoming paragraphs before reaching
to
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a concrete conclusion. It is
intutively
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intuitively
 obvious that the evolution of
media
 has brought many benefits. The
first
 and foremost pros
that
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will
gives
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 the impression that with the flourishment in radio, TV and
cellphones
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cell phones
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,
the
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universal information regarding current affairs, natural
disaster
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disasters
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, new innovations,
political
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and political
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 and social
issue
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issues
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 are available to
general
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 public.
This
 way, they became well aware
about
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 the news and can share them with their family members on online platforms. Apart from that, if a corporate organization wants to promote and
propogate
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propagate
 their latest products or services, they can run
advertisement
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advertisements
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 on social
media
 applications, blogs,
websites
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and websites
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 due to which they can reach
large
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a large
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number of
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audience and can build a
recoginzable
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recognizable
 brand. There are legitimately worrying demerits of
media
.
Firstly
. with the ongoing political debates between
politician
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politicians
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 and news
media
reporter
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reporters
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, they have to power to defame any celebrity, brand or country by disclosing find misleading information.
This
 way,
reputation
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, and fame of particular people or company can be lost.
For Example
,
a times
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a time
times
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 of India Akshay Kumar lost his name by working with
tobacco
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a tobacco
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 company. To sum up
in
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an
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aforementioned
afforementioned
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aforementioned
 paragraphs, whether the
media
 is a blessing or curse, I think
media
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the media
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 should profoundly analyze the news before releasing
to
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it to
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 social
media
.
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