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Many people join distance‐learning programs (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does. Do you agree or disagree?

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When the pandemic COVID 19 outburst,
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 condition sped up vast
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internet users leading to the introduction of a huge number of distance-learning
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 by well know universities and colleges. A lot of
people
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 see
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 opportunity to strive for knowledge and occupy themselves by enrolling the online learning
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 and studying at home.
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, there are groups of
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 who oppose their view in
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 statement that distance learning is unable to fully bring out the same advantages as attending universities or colleges does, which I do agree with. Generally, no doubt, distance-learning
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 did bring lots of benefits to
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. On top of
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 a logistic issue. With online-learning
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,
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 in other countries are able to enrol in the
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 and are eligible to
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 at home.
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,
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 will save up some cost issues like transportation fees and hostel fees for those
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 who are originally from poor families which enlightens their burden.
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, working
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 who intended to enrol in
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 to strive for knowledge, are able to
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 at their own pace at a more flexible time which is after office hours.
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, the level of concentration while studying at home might be reduced due to the surrounding factors.
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 tend to divert their concentration when they are in a too comfortable environment. For example, some
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 might
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 in their bed which makes them more sleepy. Enrolling on
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 in universities or colleges has more advantages.
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,
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 are able to concentrate
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 and enjoy the ambience and
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 environment in a proper schooling area with library facilities and
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 area.
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,
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 will enquire to complete their assignments or tasks during their
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 days, they are able to discuss the assigned projects face-to-face which will lower the misunderstanding level in communication.
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, with the presence of the group ,
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 will indirectly form peer pressure among the
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 and indirectly boost their general
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 condition. Independence value can be trained among
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 from other states or country which prepare them to face the adult world later.
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, after graduation not everyone will be able to be employed by the company in their hometown, some of them end up working in another country, and they can adapt to the different areas better compared to others. To sum up, to me, studying at a university presents more advantages compare to distance learning
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,
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,
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 should constantly strive for knowledge no matter
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 was distance- learning or on-site
study
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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