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The death penalty is the best way to control and reduce serious crime. To what extent do you agree?

#death #penalty #control #crime
Some people believe that capital punishment is extremely useful for reducing serious crime, while others think that it is unacceptable.
However
, both points of view are
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. On the one hand, the death penalty is partly useful for reducing heinous crimes since it will prevent some crimes to occur. Take China
for example
, where the death penalty is still working, and the crime rate is lower than in other countries without it.
On the other hand
,
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 kind of punishment is not fully effective, as when the
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 is committing a crime, The brain is controlled by emotions and could not think about the consequences.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • capital punishment
  • deterrent effect
  • sense of justice
  • closure
  • wrongful execution
  • life imprisonment
  • moral and ethical considerations
  • rehabilitation
  • financial and resource implications
  • desensitize
  • socio-economic biases
  • racial biases
  • retribution
  • crime rate
  • judicial system
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