The death penalty is the best way to control and reduce serious crime. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people believe that capital punishment is extremely useful for reducing serious crime, while others think that it is unacceptable.

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. On the one hand, the death penalty is partly useful for reducing heinous crimes since it will prevent some crimes to occur. Take China

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, where the death penalty is still working, and the crime rate is lower than in other countries without it.

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kind of punishment is not fully effective, as when the

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is committing a crime, The brain is controlled by emotions and could not think about the consequences.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

107 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

capital punishment
deterrent effect
sense of justice
closure
wrongful execution
life imprisonment
moral and ethical considerations
rehabilitation
financial and resource implications
desensitize
socio-economic biases
racial biases
retribution
crime rate
judicial system

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The death penalty is the best way to control and reduce serious crime. To what extent do you agree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

In today’s world, private companies rather than the government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

People nowadays tend to have children at older ages. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantags

It is a natural process for animal species to become extinct (e.g. Dinosaurs, dodos …) There is no reason why people should try to prevent this from happening. Do you agree or disagree? [359]

In many countries governments are investing in new technology to deal with the public. Why is this happening? Do you think this is an appropriate use of government money?

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?