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Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones for communication has a negative effect on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Reading and writing skills are decreasing these days. Some
people
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 think it is because of the increasing use of computers and mobile
phones
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. I strongly agree with
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 opinion. Withing advanced technology, young
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 like to use laptops or cell
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 to deal with their jobs or communities. The simple reason is that these devices are very convenient.
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, every day, we can see lots of young
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 on their way to work using their mobile
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 to send messages or emails to the customs or chat with their friends.
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, there is huge information that
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 can research online through their computers or cell
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.
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, most of them only read the chapter or sentence that they need
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 of the whole article. Thereby reading a book or whole article becomes more difficult for them.
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, young
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 who are living in
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 world which is full of competition always feel tired and stressed. To finish their job perfectly, sometimes they have to write lots of reports.
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, the best way is to use the computer and other devices to write letters, reports, or emails with the standard type of font.
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 means that writing with a computer can avoid other readers' misunderstandings. As they don’t have enough time to practice their handwriting. And using computers to write documents can give them more confidence. The disadvantage is their writing skills are declining. Even they would forget how to spell the word that they want to write because they rely on the computer. In conclusion,
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 of traditional reading and writing is a lifestyle in the future, especially for young
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. I suggest that some technology companies should develop software to help
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 practice their handwriting.
Submitted by kevin. B on

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • over-reliance
  • comprehension skills
  • digital content
  • sustained reading capabilities
  • texting and messaging apps
  • abbreviations
  • acronyms
  • emojis
  • formally and coherently
  • educational resources
  • scholarly articles
  • educational apps
  • enhance
  • digital platforms
  • blogs
  • social media posts
  • online forums
  • concise
  • impactful writing
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