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Writing Samples
Band 8

You have moved to another city but your bank has your old address and continues to send all communication there. Write a letter to your bank branch. In the letter, mention: Where have you moved to? What problem are you facing regarding the bank’s communication? What you want them to do regarding old communication already sent to the wrong address?

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Dear Sir, My name is John Smith, and I am writing
this
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 letter to request to update my
communcation
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communication
address
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 as I moved to a different city
last
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 month. Earlier I used to live in Barrie,
however
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, I recently moved to a two-story building in Hamilton. In fact, the exact
address
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 is 123, Rathburn St, Hamilton, L5F1C5, Ontario. The main problem that I am facing
due to
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this
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 incorrect bank
address
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 is the delay in the delivery of my new credit card.
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, I was expecting that card 2 weeks back which I have not received so far. I would request you to please update my
address
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 on an urgent basis. For the old letters that are already sent to the wrong
address
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, could you please track them using the tracking numbers and redirect them to my new
address
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 after checking with the delivery executives? Once again, I would be grateful if you could update my
address
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 and send the old letters to my new
address
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. Yours sincerely, John Smith

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task achievement
While your letter comprehensively addresses the prompt and effectively conveys the issue, providing a bit more detail about the problem—like explaining any potential consequences—could strengthen the task response.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is strong. Each paragraph covers a distinct point, which enhances readability. However, ensure consistency in maintaining this clarity throughout.
greeting and closing
Your letter includes a clear greeting and closing, which enhances professionalism.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph clearly articulates a single idea, improving the overall coherence of the letter.
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