It is anatural process for animals to become extinct there os no reason why people should try and avoid this happening do you agree or disagree

Nowadays, many
animals
are on the verge of
extinction
in the
world
.Truly, it is the natural
process
behind the
extinction
of many
animals
.While society plays a vital
role
to save endangered
species
by trying some restrictions.I will slightly agree with
this
argument . To commence with , the
species
are diminished by deforestation. To illustrate, by cutting down
trees
the animal
habitat
is removed so they can,t breed that's why they suddenly exit from the earth.
Moreover
, the population of society is rising and they need more food and fuel
then
they turned the
forest
to agricultural use .
in addition
to that , the type of specie may extinct because of illegal hunting .The major crime in the
world
is the pouching of
animals
.community do
this
activity for recreation , enjoyment and for memory adventure .
For instance
, according to the report published by the ",Times
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" the
last
Tasmanian tiger was killed by a man in Queensland in 2015 . On contrary , the creatures are on the edge of
extinction
because of natural
disasters
, environmental
change
and migration . To elaborate, many types of
animals
have died through natural accidents in the
forest
۔most kinds of
disasters
like earthquakes, volcanoes and floods contribute to
animals
'
death
.
Furthermore
, when the environment varies
species
migrate from one ocean to another so in their travelling they might die .if someone safely reached their desired destination they do not get suitable
habitat
.they need super
habitat
for their reproduction
process
. It can be concluded , that animaNowadays, many
animals
are on the verge of
extinction
in the
world
.Truly, it is the natural
process
behind
extinction
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of many
animals
.While
,
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the
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humans play
vital
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role
to save endangered
species
by trying some
restriction
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.
i
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will slightly
agreed
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with
this
argument . To commence with , the
species
are
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diminished
diminshed
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diminished
by
the
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deforestation. To illustrate, by
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cutting down
of
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trees
the animal
habitat
is removed so they can,t breed that's why
,
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they suddenly
extict
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extinct
exit
from
earth
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.
Moreover
, the population of
human
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humans
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is
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the rise
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rise
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and they need more food and fuel
then
they turned the
forest
into
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agricultural use .
in addition
to that , the type of specie may extinct because of illegal hunting .The major crime in the
world
is the pouching of
endangered
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an endangered
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animal
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animals
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.
Human
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Humans
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do
this
activity for recreation , enjoyment and for memory adventure .
For instance
, according to the report published by the "
Times "
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the
last
tasmanian
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tiger was killed by a man in Queensland in 2015 . On contrary , the creatures are on the edge of
extinction
because of natural
disasters
,
environment
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change
and migration . To elaborate,
the
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many
type
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of
animals
are died
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through
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natural
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accident
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in the
forest
۔most
kind
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kinds
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of
disasters
like
earthquake
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earthquakes
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,
volcano
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volcanoes
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and
flood
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floods
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contribute
contibute
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contribute
in
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animals
death
.
Furthermore
, when the environment varies
species
migrate from one ocean to another so in
his
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travelling they might die .if someone safely reached
toward
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their desired destination they
not
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get suitable
habitat
.they need super
habitat
for
his
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reproduction
process
. It can be concluded ,
the
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animals
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extinct
extent
extint
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extend
with the help of
nature
and
humans
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contribution
factors
.
Human
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cut the
trees
and do illegal hunting but
nature
ups and down
factors
and
enviroment
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environment
environmental
change
play crucial
role
in
animals
death
.ls extend with the help of
nature
and human contributing
factors
.folk cut
trees
and do illegal hunting but
nature's
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ups and down
factors
and environmental
change
play a crucial
role
in
animals'
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death
.
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