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In recent years television has contributed most to changing people's quality of life. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Modern innovations
of
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in
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 technology
has
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 changed
the
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lives.
Televsion
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Television
 is one of the primary
factor
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 to alter the life of individuals. I completely agree with
this
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 given notion and discuss
in
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it in
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 upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, news media helps to connect the world
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globally
globaly
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globally
 which benefits citizens of different countries to know about other nation's
economy
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economies
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, sports, politics,
weather
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 and technology. The
weather
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 forecast helps inhabitants to schedule plans
accordingly
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. For
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instance
instace
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instance
, Canadian employees who travel often make a week earlier timetable to prevent
the
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weather
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 challenges as in winter, conditions
of
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weather
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is
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are
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 troublesome.
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, there are many shows which are non-cultural,
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influence
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and influene
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influene
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influence
 the youth. To illustrate
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, western cultural shows admire youngsters to get bad habits
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 as smoking, drinking and fashion.
In addition
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, they
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do not
don't
donot
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do not
 respect elders and try to avoid them.
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, in India, Mumbai city is popular for young adults who just came there with the manipulation of those shows and end up living on
streets
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the streets
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. In conclusion,
TV
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the TV
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 screen has many pros that helped in
quality
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a quality
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 change
of
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 people's life.
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 negative impacts cannot be ignored
that
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they
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leads
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lead
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 to worse side.
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