In recent years television has contributed most to changing people's quality of life. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Modern innovations
of
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technology
has
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changed
the
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lives.
Televsion
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Television
is one of the primary
factor
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to alter the life of individuals. I completely agree with
this
given notion and discuss
in
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it in
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upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, news media helps to connect the world
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globally
globaly
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globally
which benefits citizens of different countries to know about other nation's
economy
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economies
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, sports, politics,
weather
and technology. The
weather
forecast helps inhabitants to schedule plans
accordingly
. For
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instance
instace
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instance
, Canadian employees who travel often make a week earlier timetable to prevent
the
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weather
challenges as in winter, conditions
of
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weather
is
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troublesome.
However
, there are many shows which are non-cultural,
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influence
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and influene
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influene
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influence
the youth. To illustrate
with
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, western cultural shows admire youngsters to get bad habits
such
as smoking, drinking and fashion.
In addition
, they
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do not
don't
donot
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do not
respect elders and try to avoid them.
For example
, in India, Mumbai city is popular for young adults who just came there with the manipulation of those shows and end up living on
streets
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. In conclusion,
TV
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the TV
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screen has many pros that helped in
quality
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a quality
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change
of
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in
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people's life.
Although
negative impacts cannot be ignored
that
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they
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leads
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to worse side.
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