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Fewer and fewer children are willing to look after their parents as they get older these days. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#children #parents #outweigh
Nowadays, when 
parents
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closeness for themselves father and mother. in my opinion,
take
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care
to
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parents
 has a huge positive effect
for
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children’s
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 to keep
better
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relationship
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 and I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of caring
to
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parents
 and provide a logical conclusion.    One of the strong
point
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 of 
take
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care
for
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parents
 is that they might
to
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end up 
to be
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a
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 up-and-coming
person
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.
This
 is because they have unlimited good deeds
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 of
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their parent’s
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parent’s
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 prey while children
caring
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to
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 their
parents
.
Furthermore
, if children had elderly
parents
 who require
a
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constant
care
and
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to give
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 quality
of
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care
 is
duty
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 of us. Take Henry Miller as an example
initially
 he was so poverty boy and he looked after to mother’s irretrievably health problem until his mother died
and
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  after
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years later he altered one of the well-known
writer
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 as a consequence of his mother’s pure
pray
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 for her child of success.  
However
, one of the main
pint
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 of
care
to
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parents
 is that they might
to
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loose
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lose
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 the major passing times when they
looking
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 after to
parents
.
Moreover
, If children’s
parents
to be
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 a disease and they convict to
care
 and
this
 situation particularly without fail lead to
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 late
to
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 school or work.
For instance
, The famous football king Mara Donna cared
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himself
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 aged
parents
 and it caused
to
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him to
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him
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 training
at
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all the time.  To conclude, though there are some disadvantages to
look
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 after
parents
 like to kill the main
times
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 and consistently late
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for works
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works
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 or study
however
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, provide 
the
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quality take
care
 to
parents
 has
a
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 extremely positive effect
for
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 children’s be cooking.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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