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Space exploration requires vast sums of money. Is the amount of money spent on space research justifiable? Could the money be better spent?

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Among the rapid development in universal technology , the more
money
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 put into it , the more super profitability bring back from
space
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research
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 .
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 somebody thinks that the budget could be more usefully applied, I strongly believe that the
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 was well-spent. It is generally believed that
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 exploration brings a lot of beneficial impacts to mankind. Expanding human knowledge, by sending reports from
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 back to Earth, can help our life become more convenient.
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, when astronauts find something new in outer
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such
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 as other homelands or new extraterrestrials, they immediately send a report about a contemporary thing that they see back to the
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 station . After that, scientists will analyze those extraterrestrials and publish them to people all over the world in other to enhance their knowledge and help them to know about that creatures in order to distinguish the good and bad effects of that species on our land.
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 , it is argued
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a group of people that the
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 should be spent on other works
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 as investing in hospitals or creating new land
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 of investing in
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research
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. If the government had just only spent
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 on helping low-income people but not pouring
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 into
space
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research
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, how would have human been when the Earth did not exist ? Investing
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 into
space
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 is not a way to squander
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 but it is a way to maintain human beings.
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 , if scientists had not done any
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, the matter of survival of mankind would have approached the edge of extinction by getting nothing ready. To conclude, giving impetus to
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research
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 does not squander the world's finance but it is a way to expand global citizens' knowledge and
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 bring many beneficial impacts to governments which find new outer
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 beings or contemporary homelands

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • justifiable
  • vast sums of money
  • satellite communications
  • economic benefits
  • climate change
  • atmospheric changes
  • global issues
  • humanitarian needs
  • STEM fields (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • colonization
  • catastrophic events
  • space exploration
  • innovations
  • job creation
  • boosting the economy
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