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Scientists and technology experts seem to be more values by modern society than musicians and artists. To what extent do you agree?

#scientists #technology #experts #values #society #musicians #artists
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people
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 and IT
specalist
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specialist
specialists
 give more preference rather than the singer and
artist
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artists
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.
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 with
society
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value
 who relate to the science field because scientists make new experiments for the country and technology
expert
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provided
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 us
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make
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society
 that
why
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 many of the most
people
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value
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 every research advantage from the government and
society
also
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respect
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artist
.
although
, there
are
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 serval
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reasons
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 to treat well with
scientist
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scientists
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 and engineers because of their qualifications and considered to be
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a reputable
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 job in our community. many
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people
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value
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 researchers and engineers
white
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 collar occupations. to illustrate, in our community almost all the
people
 will suggest their kid
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select their field
such
 as software.in many subcontinent
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countries
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country
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people
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value
 to the researcher because of their qualifications.
on the other hand
, some
people
 argue that
artist
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artists
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 and
musician
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musicians
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also
 give
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value
 and
respect
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their
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also
 show their own talent. it's not easy
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musicians
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musician
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and
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an
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artist
 because behind all
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things
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 there are too many efforts .to illustrate, all around the world
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celebrities like
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aslam
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Aslam
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 are
same
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the same
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respect
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. some
of
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apply
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the
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people
 are crazy about the singer . to sum up, research and technology experts are
give
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 more
respect
 in our
society
 than the singer and a person who
art work
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artwork
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 . I suggest
of
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apply
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the reason
such
 as
high
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qualified
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qualification
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 and make
thing
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things
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 easier for us
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