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Some people beleve that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #beleve #choices
Today,Somebody has some argue that we have many
chances
 and good
opportunities
 in our
life
. I personally agree with
this
 view that humans have a lot of
chances
 due to their
life
also
 I think
people
 should
use
 their
opportunities
 well. In my opinion,
people
 who have different occasion
opportunities
 due their
life
 have to
use
 them for improving quality of
life
.they should not let
chances
 die.
for example
,with raising technology and communication maybe I will connect to somebody who has a company and need an employee with my ability when she knows me and knows my skills and ability,she will offer me a
job
.if that
job
 is better o my
job
,that offer can be a good chance because have a more salary and an office area.of course, the choice can be about anything in
people
’s
life
.
Although
, when
people
 have a chance before using it they have to think about the effects of that on their future
life
 and if the effects are not positive
then
use
 the chance.if
people
use
 it as soon as possible,
firstly
, it is possible that they take false choices and take it difficult in their future .
secondly
 if they don’t search for the opportunity, they don’t understand that
for example
, a
job
 offer is a lie and it is cheating.
Finally
, choosing the best choice need to think and consultation.we have to
use
 our good
chances
 and we should not let them loose but it is not caused by deciding without thinking. In conclusion , today,
people
 think that we have a lot of
chances
 in our
life
.I completely agree with
this
 statement that we have good
opportunities
. Of course,we have to think well before choosing so we have the best selection .
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