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Some people beleve that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #beleve #choices
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Today,Somebody has some argue that we have many
chances
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 and good
opportunities
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 in our
life
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. I personally agree with
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 view that humans have a lot of
chances
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 due to their
life
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also
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 I think
people
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 should
use
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 their
opportunities
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 well. In my opinion,
people
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 who have different occasion
opportunities
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 due their
life
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 have to
use
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 them for improving quality of
life
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.they should not let
chances
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 die.
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,with raising technology and communication maybe I will connect to somebody who has a company and need an employee with my ability when she knows me and knows my skills and ability,she will offer me a
job
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.if that
job
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 is better o my
job
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,that offer can be a good chance because have a more salary and an office area.of course, the choice can be about anything in
people
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’s
life
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.
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, when
people
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 have a chance before using it they have to think about the effects of that on their future
life
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 and if the effects are not positive
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use
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 the chance.if
people
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use
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 it as soon as possible,
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, it is possible that they take false choices and take it difficult in their future .
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 if they don’t search for the opportunity, they don’t understand that
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, a
job
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 offer is a lie and it is cheating.
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, choosing the best choice need to think and consultation.we have to
use
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 our good
chances
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 and we should not let them loose but it is not caused by deciding without thinking. In conclusion , today,
people
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 think that we have a lot of
chances
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 in our
life
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.I completely agree with
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 statement that we have good
opportunities
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. Of course,we have to think well before choosing so we have the best selection .
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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