Some people think children should study at school and other think they should study at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays,
There
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there
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are many arguments about
children
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whether children
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should study at
school
or study at
home
, but still controversy. In my
opinion
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I totally agree that
children
can study both places (
school
or
home
) because
school
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the school
a school
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or
home
have the same objective.
However
, some people suggest that
children
should go to
school
because they can develop better social
skill
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skills
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, unlike, other people
disagree
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who disagree
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with it, they think that
children
should
taught
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be taught
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at
home
for better attention. I think it depends on family factors
such
as
number
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a number
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of
children
in
family
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the family
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,
house
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the house
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,
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the parent's
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parent's
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parents'
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timing, etc.
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