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Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home? Do you agree or disagree?

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Watching
television
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 (especially informative
television
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) has been recognised
an
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as an
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 effective method of learning because audio-visual information can attract students' attention and engage their interest.
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 many TV
programmes
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 have educational value, I do not agree that increasing screen time can yield academic benefits for
children
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.
Television
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 viewing can interfere with
children
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's studies and present challenges to their educational attainment. TV
programmes
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 can be highly addictive: soap operas
as well as cartoons
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, as well as cartoons,
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 attract young viewers with amusing characters, easy-to-understand dialogues and interesting storylines.
Children
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 who lack self-
disipline
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discipline
 may
binge watch
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 these
programmes
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 when they stay at home alone without the supervision of parents. Homework hours will diminish--a problem which can lead to poor grades.
Teachers
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 may choose educational
programmes
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, but it is the visual input, rather than content, that draws the attention of these
programmes
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 is limited. Given
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, only a moderate
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amount
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amount
 of
television
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 viewing can be accepted, provided that adults decide what
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children
childrens
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children
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 can watch. Some educational
programmes
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 spread knowledge with the support of visual information, which is easy to comprehend, especially for viewers who do not have high levels of literacy. By using video teaching material,
teachers
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 can explain some difficult concepts and theories in
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ways that are not empowered by traditional approaches. Documentaries,
for example
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, present visual evidence about a historic event and enable viewers to make sense
what
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 happened at the time easily. Young
children
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,
in particular
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, have difficulty
in
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imagining what life was like
,
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 when reading books or listening to the oral accounts of different historical periods by
teachers
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. To summarise, parents and
teachers
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 should regulate
children
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's
television
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 viewing, rather than promote
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 activity. Watching TV can have an adverse impact on
children
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's grades
although
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 sometimes it can be employed as a teaching tool.

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