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Instead of asking the government to bear the cost of higher education, students should pay their own tuition fees themselves. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#government #cost #education #students #tuition #fees
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Education
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, especially higher
education
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, has been one of the most popular topics of social issues. Some people argue that some university
students
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 are unable to pay the
cost
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 of higher
education
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 by themselves,
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 the
government
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 should bear the
tuition
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fees
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. Even if
this
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 opinion is reasonable to some extent, my view is that most
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college
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students
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 should take responsibility to bear their own
tuition
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fees
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, and poor
students
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 can receive financial support from the
government
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additionally
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.
Tuition
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fees
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 can stimulate
students
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 to study hard in
college
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. If
students
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 pay for the
tuition
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, they would choose to take the educational opportunity more seriously. When
college
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students
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 go to the lectures, they would remember that the
cost
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 of entering a
college
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 is very high.
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, they are more likely to concentrate on the lecture
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 of getting distracted. Another benefit of paying
tuition
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fees
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 by
students
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 is that it can lighten the burden on the
government
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, which can save a lot of budgets. Given the huge amount of
college
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students
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, it may be onerous for
government
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 to bear all
tuition
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fees
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. If they can pay the
cost
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 of higher
education
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 by themselves, the
government
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 could spend more money on developing basic
education
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such
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 as constructing primary and secondary schools.
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, more young people will be encouraged to attend school.
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, the money can be used in other fields
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 as the environment and hospitals, many citizens will benefit from it.
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, high
tuition
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fees
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 are unaffordable for many families and it may have an adverse impact on the development of
society
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 and the economy. If
students
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 who are excellent in academic performance but cannot afford the
cost
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 of
college
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 entrance drop out of
college
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,
society
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 may lose an outstanding talent in the future.
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, the
government
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 should support those
students
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 financially for they have the potential to contribute to
society
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 greatly.
This
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 can help close the economic divide and build a fair
society
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. In summary,
tuition
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fees
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 should be paid mainly by
college
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students
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 themselves, while the
government
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 can offer some poor but distinctive
students
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 financial support.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bear the cost
  • tuition fees
  • financial management
  • taxpayer burden
  • public finances
  • allocate resources
  • social inequality
  • socio-economic disparities
  • access to higher education
  • long-term economic benefits
  • educated workforce
  • earning potentials
  • investment vs expense
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