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Reducing global environmental damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The reduction of global environmental damage should be solved by governments rather than everyone.As far as my opinion is concerned I fully disagree with
this
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 statement because it is the responsibility of every single person to take care of the environment.
To begin
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 with, it is one of the major problems in the
world
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.It is increasing
day
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 by
day
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 and we all are witness that our environment is damaged by ourselves.We are cutting trees and demolishing the jungles.
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,we are creating every type of
pollution
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 in the
world
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 like noise
pollution
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,air
pollution
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, industrial waste and many more.Only governments cannot reduce
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 because if we don'
t
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 help them it cannot be finished from the
world
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.We should grow trees
instead
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 of cutting them,we should reduce
pollution
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,we don'
t
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 destroy the jungles,etc. On the other side, the government should make strict laws against every type of
pollution
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 if someone doesn'
t
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 follow the rules the worst punishment should be given to him/her because as we all know it is increasing
day
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 by
day
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instead
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 of decreasing.And the government should have a meeting with the scientists and ask them to invent something that can control the
pollution
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 of industries
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the air.With ,
this
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 there will be no more climate change. To conclude my essay I must say that global environmental damage will be controlled if every single person do a reduction in every type of
pollution
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.Government can only make law and it is our responsibility of us that we should follow the rules.
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 the
end
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 I will say don'
t
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 destroy your
world
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 with your own hand
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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