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Nowadays, in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household chores equally between men and women. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#countries #women #time #jobs #household #chores #men
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 world, females are
also
 working to support their families.
Accordingly
, other family responsibilities should be distributed between husband and wife. I agree with the argument, considering that we are approaching
a
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inpartial
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impartial
partial
 society and working
couple
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 is the need of the hour where women
also
 need
an
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assistance in return.
Firstly
, the global village is approaching
to
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the
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 egalitarian society,
also
 intellectual powers of male and females are indifferent and
has
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capabilities
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the capabilities
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 of performing equally in
an given circumstances
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.
Also
, each family need to enjoy the
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comfort
confort
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comfort
 and facilities, but it is not feasible if only
single
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 person is working,
thus
 ladies
also
 need to go out
for
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 work to
fulfill
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economic
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the economic
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requirements
requirments
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requirements
 of their family.
For instance
, my friend and her wife are
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two-earner
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two earner
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two-earner
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household
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households
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, so
that
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they can afford
the
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a
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 better education
of
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 their child and
same
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the same
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 time
they
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can
also
 leave
lesuire
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a lesuire
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 lifestyle. As
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women
women's
womens
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women
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 are handling these additional
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responsibilities
responsibilites
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responsibilities
,
simillarly
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similarly
 she
also
need
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a
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support to handle the household chores. So, other members of
family
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the family
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 should aid her to avoid her overloading.
On the other hand
, man can
also
 learn how to make
couisins
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cousins
 even
an
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emergency
emergecy
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emergency
 occurs in
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absence
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the absense
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absense
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absence
 of their wife. He can
also
 cater to his children and take part
finishing
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their
thier
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their
 homework, which will increase the bonding between father and children and
chances
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the chances
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 of sending the elderly to the old age home can be diminished.
Further
, women can enhance their skills and progress
further
 in
her
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their
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 career and accomplish the responsibilities of head
ot
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of
to
the
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families. To cite an example,
economic
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development
developement
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development
 of the country is refined owing
women
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to women
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 empowerment, an
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economic
ecomonic
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economic
 survey states. In conclusion, ladies should
also
 take part
providing
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in providing
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 economic support to their families and
man
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men
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 should take other responsibilities to encourage their
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counterparts
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counter parts
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counterparts
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 and help them to progress
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further
furtner
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further
.
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