In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Obesity is a very common problem nowadays , especially for the young generation.
Due to
lack of time
people prefer not to cook Add a comma
time,
food
at home
and get their meals from restaurants and this
ultimately leads to obesity and serious health issues. But I do not think advertisements are the main factor for this
.
To begin
with, junk food
is largely popular because of the hugely available hotels in multiple cuisines. These restaurants not only serve dine-in but also
provide home
delivery. As a result
, even if the young generation does not have time
to go out for a meal they can easily order online and get their food
in an hour. So, it represents that they do not even need to move from their place to get their meal. Ultimately this
is leading to bad practice. At the same time
, our community is not that much concerned about their health due to
a lack of awareness. They do not exercise at all. I believe this
issue has nothing to do with advertisements since there are tons of other factors that are promoting junk food
. For instance
, I have a cousin who is only 12 years old and he does not eat homemade food
because both of his parents are working full time
so they do not have any time
to cook for him. Because of eating heavy oily food
,regularly he has become around 60kg weight which is way too much for a child. Even though we see fancy meal content on television but
is it really going to help just to ban Correct word choice
apply
food
promotions?
On the other hand
, our media can focus more on promoting healthy lifestyle content such
as doing exercise regularly at home
can be highly beneficial for their physical fitness. Even though it is not quite possible to quit eating fast food
but
doing regular exercise can help to reduce the fat that was gained from eating that health-hazardous meal. Correct word choice
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For example
, recently in the Covid-19 lockdown, my parents monitored that they gained a lot of weight due to
staying at home
and eating rich cuisine. So, one day they saw an advertisement for doing at-home
exercises by watching YouTube. Soon they started doing those regularly and after 3 months of regular effort they lost about 10 kg weight and it improved their fitness a lot.
To conclude
, it can be said that advertising is a very useful medium to influence our community. That is
why content creators should be more careful so that they can spread awareness among the audience.Submitted by diya.afrin00 on
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