In some societies, obesity is regarded as a major problem. Some people believe that junk food advertising is largely to blame for this problem and should be banned. However, others feel that junk food advertising does not contribute to the problem of obesity and should not be banned. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Obesity is a very common problem nowadays , especially for the young generation.
Due to
lack of
time
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people prefer not to cook
food
at
home
and get their meals from restaurants and
this
ultimately leads to obesity and serious health issues. But I do not think advertisements are the main factor for
this
.
To begin
with, junk
food
is largely popular because of the hugely available hotels in multiple cuisines. These restaurants not only serve dine-in but
also
provide
home
delivery.
As a result
, even if the young generation does not have
time
to go out for a meal they can easily order online and get their
food
in an hour. So, it represents that they do not even need to move from their place to get their meal. Ultimately
this
is leading to bad practice. At the same
time
, our community is not that much concerned about their health
due to
a lack of awareness. They do not exercise at all. I believe
this
issue has nothing to do with advertisements since there are tons of other factors that are promoting junk
food
.
For instance
, I have a cousin who is only 12 years old and he does not eat homemade
food
because both of his parents are working full
time
so they do not have any
time
to cook for him. Because of eating heavy oily
food
,regularly he has become around 60kg weight which is way too much for a child. Even though we see fancy meal content on television
but
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is it really going to help just to ban
food
promotions?
On the other hand
, our media can focus more on promoting healthy lifestyle content
such
as doing exercise regularly at
home
can be highly beneficial for their physical fitness. Even though it is not quite possible to quit eating fast
food
but
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doing regular exercise can help to reduce the fat that was gained from eating that health-hazardous meal.
For example
, recently in the Covid-19 lockdown, my parents monitored that they gained a lot of weight
due to
staying at
home
and eating rich cuisine. So, one day they saw an advertisement for doing at-
home
exercises by watching YouTube. Soon they started doing those regularly and after 3 months of regular effort they lost about 10 kg weight and it improved their fitness a lot.
To conclude
, it can be said that advertising is a very useful medium to influence our community.
That is
why content creators should be more careful so that they can spread awareness among the audience.
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