Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it

Some people say that
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advertisements
advertisement
adverticements
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is
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are
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really useful to persuade us in buying things. Meanwhile, the
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think that it is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. I do agree with both of
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, and here is why. Advertising can be really successful sometimes. It is so successful that we do not realize that
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it is an
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advertisement
adverticement
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. Usually, it is the things that we currently need, or it is a thing that
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us to think that we may need it when we actually
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. We may think that we have enough, but
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what we saw on the screen, it can
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us want to buy more.
For
example
, an
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about
skincare
and cosmetics. There are so many
skincare
products, with a variety
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the
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functions and
the
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materials. The way it
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is
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different. Suppose, I already have my own
skincare
, but when I saw a
product
that looks like it
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with
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high technology, which will have a more effective effect by looking from the before and after usage, it
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me. I may not buy it directly, but I will definitely put it
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my wish list. The previous
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products, and I am aware
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kind of impact
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the advertised products compare to the things I already have. I
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to know more about the stuff and buy it. The right
product
meets the right person.
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and
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can be something that I ignore. It can be because it is something that I do not need.
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there was an email offering a discount for a particular trip. Of
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I will not investigate it
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further
futher
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because I do not plan to go anywhere or go
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at the moment. Another
example
is a brochure
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the big discount in the fruit and
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section. I may not pay attention to the brochure because I already have enough food at home, and I do not need to buy more. All in all, whether an
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advertisement
adverticement
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advertisement
is successful or not is depend on the
product
and the targeted person. The
adverticed
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advertised
product
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it will surely be ignored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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