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Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial, perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

#children #pressures #perspectives #measures
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Education is playing a crucial role in student's life because
parents
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 believe that it can change their
kid
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's lives because of
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 heirs are feeling a lot of stress from their studies as well as from social gatherings.some of the reasons for the increase in pressure is by comparing with relatives or friends children,having less focused and solution for these problems will be elaborated in the paragraph below.
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kids
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 start feeling pressured when
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 often compare them with the topper of the class or with their siblings.
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, when their elder or younger scores more marks than a
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then
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 will say why did you score less than their brother.
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, they lose interest in their studies.
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 to
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, they feel less active when it comes to social activities.They will start believing that they are not worth anything and they will suffer from mental issues.
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 because of more subjects and less time it is difficult for them to decide which is important for now.stress has a lot of effects on youth these days.
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,
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 should start appreciating their
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 rather than judging others by
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 student feels happy,guardians can help their
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 with their projects while doing
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parents
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 can understand where a student is lagging.
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 to
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, it
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 helps the
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 to improve his focus on education, the more attention the more benefits they can achieve.
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 ,when a
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 gets 90% marks in his exams
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 it is good to give him something he likes so that they want to improve to receive more gifts.Appreciate what they have has more pros. To sum up,Pressure has a lot of disadvantages for
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 ,especially in education.The way
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 treat their
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 when they score marks has more effect on students.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressure
  • globalized world
  • competitive education system
  • social media influences
  • cyberbullying
  • commercial pressures
  • aggressive marketing
  • materialistic desires
  • peer pressure
  • high expectations
  • standardized testing
  • quantifiable performance
  • stress and anxiety
  • extracurricular achievements
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