Many children these days have an unhealthy lifestyle. Both schools and parents are responsible for solving this problem. To what extent do you agree with statement?

Nowadays,

children

have many more opportunities to lead a healthy life than in the past because generally they live in hygienic surroundings and have plenty to eat.

However

, modern lifestyles mean that many

children

spend long hours in front of the television or computers, do not take a great deal of exercise and eat an unbalanced diet. I believe both

parents

and schools can do a lot to remedy

this

situation.

Parents

should limit the time that

children

spend sitting down and should encourage them to take more exercise. They could,

for example

, play sports with them at the weekend. Schools

also

should include regular exercise in their timetables, with activities

such

as physical education and compulsory sports. As far as diet is concerned, both

parents

and schools should provide

children

with a range of foods which include plenty of vegetables and fruit and only small amounts of fat. If

children

are brought up

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on a healthy diet, they learn responsible eating habits and

this

, combined with plenty of physical activity, helps them to grow into healthy adults.

On the other hand

, I think the governments and health authorities have a responsibility to teach people how to create a healthy lifestyle for

children

.

This

can be done,

for example

, by broadcasting programmes about healthy eating on television, or by giving courses to new

parents

on how to bring up their

children

. In conclusion, I believe that governments can encourage and help by giving information to people.

However

, the responsibility for bringing up

children

with a good healthy lifestyle lies with the people who are in regular contact with them,

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their

parents

and their teachers.