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The tables show the average monthly income for a selection of

The tables show the average monthly income for a selection of
The tables show the average monthly income for a selection of jobs in
Thailand
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 and
Australia
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 in 1997. They can be grouped into
graduate
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 and non-
graduate
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 occupations.
Overall
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 it can be seen that almost all the
salaries
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 are higher in
Australia
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 than
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Thailand
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in Thailand
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. The figures are given in Thai Baht. Both tables show that the
salaries
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 were much higher in the
graduate
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 group than
the
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in the
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non-
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non-graduate
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graduate
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 group. In
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Thailand
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,Thailand
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 they ranged from 85,000 for accountants to 242,000 for lawyers, and in
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Australia
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,Australia
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 the range was from 125,500 for accountants up to 350,000 for surgeons.
On the other hand
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, non-
graduate
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 jobs had significantly lower incomes in both countries.
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, in
Thailand
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,
salaries
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 started at 3,500 for labourers and went up to 7,000 for bus drivers.
Similarly
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 in
Australia
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, the range was from 50,000 for waiters to 75,000 for bus drivers.
Salaries
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 were higher in nearly all the jobs in
Australia
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 than in
Thailand
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 in both
graduate
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 and non-
graduate
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 groups.
For example
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, shop assistants and dentists earned 53,500 and 195,000 respectively in
Australia
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,
while
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, in
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Thailand
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,Thailand
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 they were paid 5,500 and 187,000. The exception to
this
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 was lawyers, who received 210,000 in
Australia
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 and 242,000 in
Thailand
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words thailand, australia, graduate, salaries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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