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the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane

#process #sugar #cane
The diagram provides information about how sugar is made from sugar cane. Overall, there are 7 stages of producing
this
 product which
involve
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 growing,harvesting, making syrup, centrifuging and
finally
 drying and cooling until it is ready and the process starts when it grows enough to be picked. As is shown in the diagram before harvesting canes manually by local labourers or using special machines they have to grow for about one or one and half years in the field. After that prepared sugarcanes should be crushed in a crusher machine to have resulted in the formation of juice. Afterwards,
this
 fluid is purified by using limestone filtering,which is done before heating in the evaporator until it produces syrup. The
next
 stage includes separating sugar crystals from the well-prepared syrup. In the final ,stage those crystals are dried and cooled properly in a container to reach the goal of manufacturing carbohydrates.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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