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Advanced technology has brought many beneficial changes to the world. However, some old people today struggle with the use of technologies such as mobile phones and the Internet. How can the elderly benefit from using advanced technologies? How can the elderly be encouraged to use consumer electronics more often?

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Technological advancements have been essential and beneficial for modern life.
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, some elderly
people
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 have difficulty using technologies like mobile phones and the Internet nowadays. In my opinion,
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 development has made elderly
people
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’s lives more convenient, and technology companies should create an application that can measure
people
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's
health
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everyday
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 to encourage old
people
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 to use it more frequently.
Developed
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 technology has brought a convenient life for elderly
people
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. They can read online news and order
foods
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 online on their smartphones. One of the most salient illustrations of
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 is in the Covid19 era
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 when many places closed, technological advancements allow old
people
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 to follow up
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epidemic
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 situation easily and they can order
foods
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 at home without interacting with other
people
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.
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, they can keep in touch with their families
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 the
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 situation via social media,
such
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 as Facebook Messenger and Skype. In order to encourage the elderly to use technologies more frequently, technology companies should create and develop a
health
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 measurement application and those apps can look over older residents on a daily basis, like heart rate or water.
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 argument rests on the fact that in the Covid19 pandemic, older
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 experienced the effects of the
epidemic
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 and their
health
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 somehow might be weaker than before the disease.
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, they may be more worried about their
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although
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 the
epidemic
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 situation is controlled nowadays. So those applications could help them check their
health
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 daily, which means encouraging them to use
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 more often. In conclusion, technological developments bring a convenient life for elderly citizens and those applications are built by technologies businesses can measure their
health
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 on a daily basis.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

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  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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