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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skill and imagination than reading. To what extent do you agree?

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There is no person in
this
 world, who is untouched by the recreational activities of
children
.A segment of society opines that performing interesting actions with kids can equip better
skills
 and imagination than reading.I do agree with the concept wholeheartedly and advocate for the support of the Government.
This
 essay shall analyse the concept from a wide angle and put forward examples from my own experience.
First
 of all,
children
 are always a centre of attraction wherever they are.They can easily get attention through their facial features, age,style of talk,creativity so on.While being with a child ,our mindset is
also
 adapting to their style and can make a cathartic effect even though we do accumulate a lot of stress.
This
 is gradually developing soft
skills
 among us. A study conducted at old age homes , reveals that the elderly become more active while they are with
children
.so it can be used as a method of learning new
life
skills
 with freshness in mind .
Secondly
, as we know learning is an ongoing process in each one's
life
, and we often forget or ignore basic soft
skills
 in our busy scheduled
life
. Here learning becomes easier and even more interesting for anyone while they involve with kids.
Moreover
,we develop a combined session of learning and practice while being with
children
.In reading, we simply get stuff in our brain and do not come to practice due to the fast movement of
life
. Having considered my perspective,I strongly support the learning method of spending time with a kid
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than anything as it provides freshness of mind .
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