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Foreign visitors should pay more than locals visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#visitors #locals #attractions
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It is argued that foreign
tourists
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 should pay more
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 in comparison
with
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 the native
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,
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when they visit
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historical places. In my point of view, I believe
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 approach is not efficient for some reasons that I will expand
in
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 the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
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the
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globalization, the tourism industry is going wider rather than past. So the
government
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 should not force overseas to
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 more than local visitors for a number of reasons.
Firstly
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,
this
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 approach may
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causes
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cuases
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cause
 damage
on
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economical
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the economical
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 situation of the host
country
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. It means, when the
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foreign
foregin
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foreign
 person
realize
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 that the host
government
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 give more
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in charge
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from
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 them, it is possible to have a negative impact on their ideas.
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, their
decessions
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decisions
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 are diminished and
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they
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the
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 would not go to the places. So, some profits are going to diminish for local
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 and
people
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.
Secondly
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,
this
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 leads to a harmful impress on the fame of the destination. Because visitors think they are suffering from
that
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government
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to pay
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 extra money than folk
people
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. Due to
the
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 fact,
it
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has a bad effect on the appearance of that nation among
another countries
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 opine that
tourists
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 should pay more because of a prominent reason. They claim
reaciving
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receiving
 more
charge
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 can
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beneficial
 for the income of the
country
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,
tourists
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 contribute
in
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 the economy of the host
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by
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through
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 many activities
such
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public transport, going to
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restaurant, or many
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alternative
alternavtive
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alternative
 activities. So, I think it is not essential to
paying
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 more
the
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 local individuals. In conclusion,
although
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 it seems beneficial for the
country
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 to gain more profit by
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receiving
reasiving
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receiving
 more cash from overseas who visit the tourist places in the
country
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 than locals, it could be distractive for
tourism
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the tourism
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 industry
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for
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fore
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for
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 some
reason
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reasons
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 that
are
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 mentioned above. In my way of thinking, every
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effort
affort
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effort
 should be made to attract
tourists
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 from other nations and it is so unfair to force them to
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 more than folks.
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