Foreign visitors should pay more than locals visitors for cultural and historical attractions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

It is argued that foreign
tourists
should pay more
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in comparison
with
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the native
people
,
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when they visit
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historical places. In my point of view, I believe
this
approach is not efficient for some reasons that I will expand
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the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, with
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globalization, the tourism industry is going wider rather than past. So the
government
should not force overseas to
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more than local visitors for a number of reasons.
Firstly
,
this
approach may
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causes
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cuases
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cause
damage
on
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economical
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situation of the host
country
. It means, when the
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foreign
foregin
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foreign
person
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that the host
government
give more
charge
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from
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them, it is possible to have a negative impact on their ideas.
Consequently
, their
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are diminished and
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the
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would not go to the places. So, some profits are going to diminish for local
government
and
people
.
Secondly
,
this
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leads to a harmful impress on the fame of the destination. Because visitors think they are suffering from
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government
to pay
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extra money than folk
people
. Due to
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fact,
it
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has a bad effect on the appearance of that nation among
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.
On the other hand
, some
people
opine that
tourists
should pay more because of a prominent reason. They claim
reaciving
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receiving
more
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can
benefical
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beneficial
for the income of the
country
.
However
,
tourists
contribute
in
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the economy of the host
country
by
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many activities
such
as using
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public transport, going to
the
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restaurant, or many
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alternative
alternavtive
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alternative
activities. So, I think it is not essential to
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more
the
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local individuals. In conclusion,
although
it seems beneficial for the
country
to gain more profit by
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receiving
reasiving
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receiving
more cash from overseas who visit the tourist places in the
country
than locals, it could be distractive for
tourism
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the tourism
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industry
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fore
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some
reason
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reasons
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that
are
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mentioned above. In my way of thinking, every
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effort
affort
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effort
should be made to attract
tourists
from other nations and it is so unfair to force them to
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more than folks.
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