Some people today have argued that countries should interfere less in the affairs of other nations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Every independent country

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their own foreign policy and internal procedures.

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is one of the major

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of the country`s development,

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however

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support the opinion that foreign

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should not interfere in

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matters of

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independent country. I will enumerate my reasons below.

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of all, communication is a key to every successful

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therefore

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without proper information nations should avoid

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in the way of

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of others. Often more developed

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try to control or suggest

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approach to some

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because they are more experienced, but

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is exactly the same situation as adults

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to control teenagers and often ends up with failure.

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, due to

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in Russia lot of Russians started to travel to Mongolia and

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government wants to stop that movement, some of our people now believe that they

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to manipulate our government and take all the natural resources, but

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propaganda which is not true.

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kind of

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often creates fear and misunderstanding among ordinary people,

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might affect

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countries

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in a negative way.

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, independence means that country should be able to make

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mistakes and learn from

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as long as that problem is not affecting other

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. We should make clear boundaries of what

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problems

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are internal and which

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will need

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support from others.

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, we don`t really care about what our neighbours eat at their homes, but if there is

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loud

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or something that bothers us we would go there and ask. In my

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every mega

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micro

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example, so we should respect

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privacy as well as

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internal

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. To conclude, I fully agree that

countries

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should not interfere

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in nation`s

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nation`s

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affairs without proper communication,

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it will affect

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the international

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relationship

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and positive cooperation.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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