Social media such as Facebook, Twitter and Instagram has replaced face-to-face communication in our everyday life. Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages.

In recent years, there is a growing recognition of
popularity
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the popularity
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of social
media
which is replacing face-to-face
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interaction
interactions
iteraction
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interaction
among
people
many
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societies.
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essay will discuss
advantages
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the advantages
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and disadvantages of
this
issue. On the one hand, it is obvious that there are many significant benefits when social
media
apps takes place of face-to-face
to
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communication
. one of the major merits is that social
media
allows
people
to communicate any time,
it
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which
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means that user can
talking
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with everyone
do
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not need to be near them. Take Facebook as
example
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, user can use Facebook
messenge
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messenger
message
send
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to send
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picture , call videos, chat voice or simple message
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depending
depeding
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depending
on the situation,
this
lead to much more
people
communicate
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with friends and family. Another positive is need to mention is that the
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quality
quility
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ability
to communicate is
the
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better,
this
is mainly because
people
can
to
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keep in touch with friends or family in covid-19.
Consequently
the geographical is narrowed because of social
communication
.
On the other hand
, there are some shortcomings when using social
media
communication
is omnipresence, the
first
and obvious demerit is that using social
media
apps
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the
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long time which
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lead
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to
short-sighted
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. In other
word
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,
people
have few outdoor activities which is decrease their health. The result of
this
is that
,
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more and more
people
do not like to hang out together. Another negative aspect is that the modern couple
meet
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through Tinder,
Instagram
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and Instagram
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and
break
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breaks
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up
on
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via
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Facebook messages. , they do not go outside their home to interact.
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the population is becoming isolated and lonely. In
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conclusion
conlusion
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conclusion
,
people
speak face-to-face less than ever today, my opinion social
media
advantages outweigh
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disadvantages
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the disadvatanges
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disadvatanges
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disadvantages
.
People
should try to balance the time between talking online and
communication
face-to-face.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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