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Some people think that computer and internet are important in children study but other think students can learn effectively in schools and with teachers. discuss both sides and give your opinion

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It is often argued that young people should study at school and with professionals in the area while others believe computers and
internet
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the internet
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 are
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essential
essencial
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essential
 to their
studies
. I agree with both views as
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technology
technologi
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technology
 is extremely important nowadays and
also
 effective
to
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children
's education as well as studying presencial. The following paragraphs will highlight both sides and some relevant examples.
First
 of all,
in
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these days,
internet
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 has many
contends
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contents
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which
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that
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 help
giving
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 information and assist
studies
. Individuals can easily find educational sites
such
 as YouTube,
Wikepedia
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Wikipedia
, and even on social media. It has
support
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 many students around the world to keep informed and learn at
anytime
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any time
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 and anywhere.
For example
, a five years old girl does not need to go to the library to find a book she would get
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 to read,
instead
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 she can have many options online without any help.
Therefore
,
this
 facilitates
children
 to get to
studies
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their studies
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.
However
, presencial educational communities are
immensily
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immensely
 important to
children
.
Although
 young people can have
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contact
contatc
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contact
 from home to their
studies
, they
also
 need to learn how to deal with other
children
,
to
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be
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disciplined
disiplined
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disciplined
, and get
use
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 to timetables.
For instance
, a child who is
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touch
taught
tauch
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taught
 from home
,
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 can learn in a very
effectively
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 way the subjects
,
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 but will have problems in the future to be with others and
work
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working
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 in
group
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a group
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. For that reason,
children
 should study at school and develop their skills with their
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. To conclude, based on my
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opinion
opnion
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opinion
,
children
 should go to school to learn how to deal with daily routine and increase their abilities with others, but they
also
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access
acess
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access
 to the internet as there is a lot of information and it helps them to study.
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