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With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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With the advancement of technology and modern medical systems, senior citizens must be treated more carefully by society.
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, there is a dilemma whether the public can manage the growing number of old
people
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. I would like to present a more detailed view
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 below.
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, we must be extra kind to every aged person and help them with whatever is needed. Nowadays, the younger generation is more dependent on old age homes to take
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 of their parents or grandparents. It is hard to believe that these
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 who raised us are being left to caretakers to survive the rest of their lives in loneliness.
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, in the country of India, it used to be a tradition to
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 for the aged parents as they nurtured us when we were kids.
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, in the current world, with the evolving changes in work and lifestyle,
people
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 have opted to keep them in old age homes.
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, there is a growing number of old
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 owing to the matter of fact that the overall population itself is raising.
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, I do not find any difficulty in addressing the raising numbers as they still fall under a similar range compared to the overall population.
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, in India overall population has increased by 30% over the
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 20 years, whereas, elder
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 have grown by only 25%.
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, few nations have an increasingly older generation of
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 and they have to find options for additional
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 centres to accommodate the raising numbers. To conclude, it's each and every individual responsibility to look after the senior citizens with utmost
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 and respect.
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 it is understandable under certain circumstances there is a need for additional old age homes to accommodate more
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.
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