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Is technology limiting creativity? Discuss your opinion

#technology #creativity
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There are technological limitations to the inventiveness and health of children and adults, especially brain activity.
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 essay will discuss sides of those including my perspectives. On the one hand,
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 become an integral part of
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. Nothing can be done without them.
People
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 in developing countries are surrounded by
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.
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, calculators, TV, telephone, washing machine, refrigerator and various other appliances are robots. That's why
people
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 today are very lazy and mentally inferior compared to before.The level of education of young
people
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 is very low.He made us so lazy to create that we can't imagine living a day without
technology
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.
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,Technologies are evidence of our progress and development. Technologies that make
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's work easier,
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, driverless cars, various types of computers, and expensive phones with a wide range of possibilities, with them life is very intense and young
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 have many opportunities. It helps to save time
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 because by using different devices, simple tasks can be done in minutes
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 of hours.With the click of a button, one can witness any event happening far away. In ,conclusion no matter how much
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 makes us lazy, it helps us to save time and create new inventions with the help of
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 and save our time I believe that the internet and the like are really good for
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