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Increasingly, people eat food from other parts of the world rather than local food. What do you think is driving this trend? Is this a good or bad development?

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People
 always undermine the
food
 that surrounds them, sometimes it is because
we
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 like to taste something different from what we always have.In the
next
paragraphs
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 I am going to explain why
people
 like to eat
food
 from other parts of the world than local
food
. Somehow, we always think other
countries
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countries'
country's
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food
 is better than our local
foods
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food
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.
People
 tend to think
food
 that they plant on their own is not good enough and would love to try other states" foods,
also
its
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apply
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because of a certain status level, when buying imported foods
it
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is
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 a sign of being wealthy, because it is more expensive to buy
food
 from another country than to buy locally, but
on the other hand
people
also
 prefer to buy from far because the
food
 they want can not be grown in their local area due to climatic conditions. I prefer to buy locally
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because
beacause
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because
 I will uplift the local agricultural system,
also
 buying locally uplift
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local economy and
also
 create jobs locally for farm workers and
food
 industry workers.Buying locally put my mind at
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ease
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easy
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ease
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 and not worry about how the
food
 is grown and processed ,because with local
food
 you can
have
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take tours
in
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of
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 farms and
food
 industries where you will see and learn how the
food
 is handled before
displayed
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being displayed
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 on the market.
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