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Some people believe that countries should produce the food to feed their population themselves and import as little as possible. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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The variety of
food
 present in the
country
 is available from the mixture
country
's growth and import from worldwide. It is argued that edible
items
 which are manufactured in the
country
, should be the only source of
food
 for the population and the number of imported
food
items
 should be minimized.
This
 essay totally disagrees that imports should be decreased as manufactured
food
 should be the only
items
 available because like
this
 nutrient requirements will suffer and the
country
 will lose its foreign relationships. The limited supply of imported
food
 products will affect the essential nutrient intake required by the body to strengthen human beings. To be more clear, even though
countries
 produce different
food
items
, they can not produce a variety of nutrients containing foods required by our bodies.
This
 is why foods are being imported to fulfil the gap
of
Change preposition
in
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 the missing
food
 industry, as a ,result healthy calories and supplies
are
Change the verb form
is
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 achieved by the human body.
For example
,
although
 avocadoes are not produced in Pakistan they are outsourced internationally, which helps in a weight reduction of the population, possibly leading to a healthy lifestyle.
This
 shows that the more variation in
food
, the healthier the society. Another reason why
food
 import should not be decreased is the fact that it will influence the relationship of different
countries
 with each other.
That is
 to say that, while the
country
 will only be focused on their supplies, there are other
countries
 who would want to grow economically by exporting their
food
 products which will affect foreign relationships.
For instance
, Iran has been always 70% dependent on its own supply with minimal imports leading to suffering their citizen achieving international visit visas due to poor relationships. It is evident that economic growth comes with imports and exports of the
country
 leading to the development of citizens' living. In conclusion,
although
 a
country
 can be dependent on its own manufacturers it is important to have variations of
food
 in the
country
 as it helps to provide nutrients as well as beneficial for the growth of
countries
 leaders as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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