Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. Do you agree or disagree?

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In our modern life, due to advanced

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it is

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that since everyone has access to the Internet , exhibitions are no longer indispensable because everyone can see primordial things or pieces of art

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through

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a laptop. In the following essay, I will explain why I strongly disagree with

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view. On the one hand, it is important to note that since historical

artifacts

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and paintings are only available in digital form on monitors, they cannot provide the public

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true

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of what they

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For instance

, visitors to an exhibit can not only take in the unique features of the craft, but they can

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enjoy and comprehend the point that author is trying to make.

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, there are occasions

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information regarding cultural property and artistic works on the Internet is untrue,

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as when the creator or title of some images is

incoherently

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, which is a serious hindrance to

humans

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knowledge.

On the other hand

, these places foster a tranquil environment

that

is simplifies

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the process for everyone to escape from the stresses of daily life .

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when

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visit

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offline museums they will feel the real ambience of the painting that the

authore

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author

wanted to convey, especially

this

will assist those people who explore ancient

artifacts

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to see with their own eyes and enjoy

from

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real art and understand the meaning of which cannot be found on the Internet. In conclusion,

although

historical sites can now be visited online, I believe that due to the benefits that

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foundation

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and

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offer, they should be visited by people for real.

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9Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
23Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

266 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today because everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Many social media accounts are fake. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

You are having a party and want to invite your friend from a different city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Describe why you are having the party • Give directions on how to get to the venue • Suggest how you can accommodate him/her

Nowadays, many people send their children to boarding schools so that they can have time to work. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The diagram shows how Liverton docks change since 1980. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.