Some people advocate the death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society.Describe the advantages and disadvantages of the death penalty and give your opinion.

These days, governments who direct a few countries approve
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capital punishment for people who are criminals or
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in my region and other countries prohibit
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any person the police put in prison. Nowadays, people who govern in China , Iran or Iraq sometimes decide to sentence to death those who
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a horrible crime or individuals who make demonstrations versus poverty or decrees
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because they desire
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political and social change there.
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not repress the population who reside in my country and other regions. In fact , people often make
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for various motivations regarding salary, healthcare and public
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without using any form of aggressivity in these places. When policemen put criminals in prison in
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for a short or long time . Of course,
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them to think about the reason they seriously offend others, they might reflect on their behaviour and desire to change their own life. I do not think that
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capital punishment is a good idea since any individual who chose to kill someone else always turns into a criminal.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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