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More and more countries have a problem with plastic waste, polluting the countryside and oceans. What problems does it cause? How can these problems be solved?

#countries #plastic #waste #countryside #oceans
In
this
 contemporary epoch,
plastic
 usage is increasing at an alarming rate and its deleterious effects have become a
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controversial
controverial
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controversial
 argument. Whilst some proponents claim that
the
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plastic
 material is considered a beneficial invention. some opponents and I hold a diverse stance. In
this
 essay, the detrimental outcomes along with the possible solutions will be
further
 explained. to
emark
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embark
mark
 on, despite the fact that
the
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plastic
 bags and carriers are paramount in
the
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daily life, they still have negative impacts on the local ecosystem, and they can harm
the
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aquastic
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aquatic
 animals.
This
 means that when
plastic
 wastes
buried
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are buried
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 in
soil
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the soil
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 or thrown into oceans, they will enter
food
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the food
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 chain, and cause
plethora
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 of life-threatening diseases, or even death. an eminent example is a hungry sea turtle which may mistake a transparent bag for jellyfish and eat it, so it will choke on
plastic
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a plastic
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 bag, and painfully die.
Therefore
, what can be said is that
plastic
 containers are not biodegradable, and it may take
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hundreds
hudreds
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hundreds
 of years to decompose into pieces.
Thus
, it should be restricted.
Furthermore
, authorities are in charge of mitigating
this
 dilemma
,
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 and legislating some restricted rules to curb its harmful
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consequences
cosequences
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consequences
.
In other words
, if
government
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 launches awareness-raising campaigns concerning the availability of environmentally friendly replacements, the
overconsmption
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overconsumption
 of
plastic
 carriers will be controlled.
This
 can be witnessed by Germany, which has the highest rate of recycling globally, where more than half of its wastes have been recycled and manufactured.
accordingly
, in a final analysis, oceans' marine life and soil have borne the brunt of the pollution because of
plastic
 refuse, and state involvement is a panacea for
this
 dilemma. In conclusion, after
this
 essay has manifested the above-mentioned points, it can be reiterated that not only do harsh punishments conserve natural habitat, but
also
 they decrease
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morbidity rates. I am convinced that without constructing
plastic
 banks for
plastic
 recycling, oceans and land could not have been preserved.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aquatic ecosystems
  • terrestrial ecosystems
  • entangled
  • degradation
  • toxic substances
  • infiltrate
  • food chain
  • economic implications
  • municipalities
  • biodegradable
  • responsible consumption
  • incentivizing
  • environmentally friendly
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