Your company is going to organise a special training course for a few staffs. Your manager has asked you to find out if the local conference centre has the right facilities to hold this course. Write a letter to the manager of the conference centre. In your letter: give details about the course describe what equipment you will need for the course ask some further questions about the facilities at the conference centre
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Dear Sir or Madam,
Greetings,
I hope
this
letter finds you well, I am writing this
letter regarding the training courses hall in your centre, and I would like to make a reservation next week, I have some inquiries in this
matter.
Firstly
, our company hired new accountants, therefore
, they must have a training course of
using the updated software, Change preposition
in
additionally
, the senior accountant
is immensely needing a huge hall to teach them all at one time.
Fix the agreement mistake
accountants
Secondly
, the manager mentioned that we need some special equipment such
as twenty computers
devices, Change the noun form
computer
strong
network connection, and Correct article usage
a strong
an
assistance to be there. Remove the article
apply
Moreover
, if the cafe is still running there, that will be perfect.
Finally
, we need to be sure that the computers are well-updated so we can install our software without problems. Furthermore
, if can you host the training course at night time, as we can arrange the training after the work hours.
I am looking forward to your kind reply,
Best Regards,
John Adams.Submitted by abdoo.magicoo on
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coherence cohesion
Work on further organizing paragraphs to ensure each paragraph covers a single idea more clearly. This will enhance the overall coherence of your letter.
coherence cohesion
Make the opening sentence more informative by directly mentioning the purpose of the letter. This will improve the logical flow from the beginning.
task achievement
Although you have given details about the course and asked relevant questions, be more specific about the equipment and facilities required to achieve a full response.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and formal, which is suitable for business correspondence.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and contribute to the overall structure.