Some experts suppose that when a country is already rich, any additional increase in economic wealth does not make its citizens happier. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Few experts
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think that when a
nation
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is already wealthy so any other increase in the economy does not make the motherland happy. I disagree with the statement and I will clear
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up in my upcoming essay.
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, every individual has enough cash.
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, if the country's economy grows
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the
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's
people
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have much money to live their life in a better way and
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make they are every wish true and fulfil their family demands to
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the
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should need to make some additional increase so the community every single person have good cash because a state ,not every human is rich and have funds to live their soul.
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, in a country minimum wage is 30000 annual and the minimum salary is 100000.
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, more economic growth makes every character equal.
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,
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have more employment. To clear my point, if a
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increase in economic growth so definitely some new business and sectors
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build so it give the country's population good job opportunities and fewer individuals face difficulties finding work and the motherland
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develop in a good way and set an example worldwide.
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, many states making new ways to give employment to their public and become powerful nations.
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, the
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became powerful and independent. To oppose
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argument, the
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face less stress and problem. Rather, if the county already has enough funds to take care of their individual so in bad time , the
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no need to worry
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a person should take retirement at a set age and live their life freely because now government care the human and live happy heart. In conclusion, more economic growth makes the
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every single person rich as well as they have good jobs and a better future but
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, giving no more funds work including than individual is more stress-free and good life after the work soul break but I stand with my point that more economy builds the better union.
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