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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctor and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries to work in developed countries. What problems does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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Many
specialists
 which include
people
 with doctorate degrees and tutors are interested in migrating to modern
countries
 in order to work.
Therefore
, their migration brings up obstacles which are about to be debated, and proposed solutions are about to be suggested as well. To commence with the problems, the departure of
specialists
 from a poor country could be detrimental to the state of intellectuality of a society.
As a result
, society would be less intelligent in terms of science and professions.
For example
, Iran has the most increasing rate of teacher migration.
Consequently
, the educational system of
this
 country performed poorly, and students are not educationally smart since they didn't have proper guidance in schools. Another obstacle is that by experiencing a decrease in the number of professionalists that accommodate poor
countries
, these undeveloped
countries
 will remain in terrible conditions because they don't have efficient
specialists
 as working forces. In order to tackle
this
, many
people
 suggest that governments of undeveloped
countries
 have to contribute grants and donations to highly skilled
people
 to make them satisfied in their own country. As a consequence, they would stay in their homeland to work.
Moreover
, they could serve their own homeland with passion. Another suggestion is that by accelerating the growth in economical areas, the
specialists
 could have
better living
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 situations, and their tendency to leave their
countries
 would be less than before. In conclusion, the increasing number of immigrants among skilful
people
 could have some issues. In order to overcome these problems government funding and attributing efforts to increase the growth in economical areas are proposed as solutions.
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