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The roads in major cities today are often difficult to travel on. What are the causes of this? What are some possible solutions?

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 in many big nowadays are in extremely poor condition which makes it very difficult to use them for travelling purposes.the reasons contributing to
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 factor are ministry negligence and poor manufacturing
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, by doing a collective effort as a community and coming forward together along with improved developmental
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 situation can be tackled.
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, travelling is a basic necessity for everyday life and people use
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 almost every day in their lives,but, unfortunately, due to poor measures taken by the government road travel is not pleasant anymore,
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, once the
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 are constructed they need proper maintenance from time to time, the officials do not take
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 matter seriously and people have to bear the consequences,
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, many construction companies are dishonest in terms of using good material, they often buy cheap products in order to put some money into their own pockets.
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 problem is widespread ,few necessary measures can be taken to deal with
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 ongoing issue,
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 as communities can come forward to make complaints to the government in time about
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 condition and encouraging them to deal with
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 matter as quickly as possible and doing whatever is in their control as groups.
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, keeping an eye on construction
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 and supplying them with all the materials can solve many problems. In conclusion,
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 are getting damaged due to poor construction
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 and no proper maintenance and care but we can deal with
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 issue through collective community
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 along with government proper planning and good checks and balances.
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