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Is mental strength important for success or is it more important to be strong and fit for success in sport.? Discuss both views and give your opinion

#strength #success #sport
Having good mental health is crucial in
sports
, while some people think it is more beneficial to have a strong
body
instead
. Both of these are necessary for every
sports
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this
essay
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 I discuss both mental and physical strength and give my own opinion.
Firstly
, when it comes to playing
sports
 mental play an important role in
player’s
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a player’s
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 performance. No matter how good you are, you
can’t
 compete with others if your mental health is bad.
For instance
, many chess professionals lose matches, because they
can’t
 stay clams and focus on the games, causing them to make the wrong move. Because of anxiety and toxic people and
community
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 they have to overcome those pressure.
Hence
, having good mental health is needed to stay competitive in
sports
. Training your
body
 to be in good shape is crucial for every athlete. No matter how talented you are you
can’t
 win over your competitors without training your
body
.
For example
, athletes that
can’t
 outrun their competitors are usually not in good shape and didn’t
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practice
practicee
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practice
 causing them to be outrun and not get into the top 3 spots.
Thus
, athletes needed to practice and train their bodies to play at their best. In conclusion, having
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mental
manual
mantal
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mental
 strength helps you stay competitive in competition while training your
body
 to be in good shape
help
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 you archive a better performance in
sports
.
Therefore
, having both
mental
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 and strong and healthy
body
 helps you archive better
result
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results
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 in
sports
 and advance your future in every competition.
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