some people think that the most important thing about beging rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. do you agree or disagree?

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thought the most crucial thing to being rich is it gives a person the
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opportunity
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealthy
  • financial resources
  • philanthropy
  • charitable organizations
  • donations
  • fundraising
  • support
  • initiatives
  • contribute
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • selfless
  • altruistic
  • prioritize
  • personal gain
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