Some parents think it is a good idea to give their children mobile phones, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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parents
believe it is
a
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ideal to give their
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kids
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mobile
phones
, but whilst others disagree with
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view both
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side and
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give your personal point of view.
To begin
with, The
people
who believe that mobile
phones
important
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thing for their
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children
childrens
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children
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.
firstly
, I would like to highlight that
parents
give more preference to giving
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smartphones
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smart
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smartphones
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phones
to their
kids
because they can take help in
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their daily
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lifestyles
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.
In other words
,
people
think that their
kids
can take help from their
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smartphones
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smart
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phones
to make
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easier in their life.
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96%
parents
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think that giving
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their life easier while making assignments
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their schools.
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,
Parents
think that mobile
phones
are base need of their life in
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era. Because through smartphones
kids
can inform their
parents
and let them about the exact location.
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my
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early age when I go
for
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takimg
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taking
class so I inform my
parents
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my phones
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phones
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phone
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.
On the other hand
, Some
people
argue that it isn't
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idea for giving
phones
to their
kids
. because
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easy to access
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the
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bad websites by using smartphones. To illustrate, 25 % of
kids
are using pornhubs online sites on their
phones
that
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why many
parents
aren't comfortable enough to
giving
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give
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phones
to
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children
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their childrens
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childrens
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children
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.
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moreover
,
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would to like highlight some
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view
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giving
phones
to
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children
children's
chlidrens
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children
is quite different. because many
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students are
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of
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using mobiles
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in
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ages
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children
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playing video all the time and wasting their time . To sum up.
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some
soms
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Some
think that it is a good idea for giving
phones
to
kids
but other
people
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disagree
disgree
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disagree
with it.
such
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help them for
kids
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inform their
parents
everything.
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