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Some parents think it is a good idea to give their children mobile phones, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#parents #idea #children #phones
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parents
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a
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ideal to give their
kid
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kids
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 mobile
phones
, but whilst others disagree with
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 view both
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side and
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 give your personal point of view.
To begin
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people
 who believe that mobile
phones
important
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 thing for their
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children
childrens
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children
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.
firstly
, I would like to highlight that
parents
 give more preference to giving
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smartphones
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smart
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smartphones
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phones
 to their
kids
 because they can take help in
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lifestyles
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.
In other words
,
people
 think that their
kids
 can take help from their
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smartphones
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smart
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smartphones
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phones
 to make
thing
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 easier in their life.
For instance
, In
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 96%
parents
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 think that giving
phones
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 their life easier while making assignments
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Furthermore
,
Parents
 think that mobile
phones
 are base need of their life in
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 era. Because through smartphones
kids
 can inform their
parents
 and let them about the exact location.
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,
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my
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 early age when I go
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takimg
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taking
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parents
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my phones
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phones
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phone
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.
On the other hand
, Some
people
 argue that it isn't
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 idea for giving
phones
 to their
kids
. because
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 easy to access
on
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the
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bad websites by using smartphones. To illustrate, 25 % of
kids
 are using pornhubs online sites on their
phones
that
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why many
parents
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giving
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phones
 to
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children
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their childrens
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childrens
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children
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.
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moreover
,
i
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 would to like highlight some
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 giving
phones
 to
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children
children's
chlidrens
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children
 is quite different. because many
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students are
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of
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in
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an
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ages
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. Many
of
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children
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are addict
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 playing video all the time and wasting their time . To sum up.
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some
soms
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Some
 think that it is a good idea for giving
phones
 to
kids
 but other
people
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disagree
disgree
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disagree
 with it.
such
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also
 help them for
kids
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 inform their
parents
 everything.
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