Overpopulation is the world's most serious environmental problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It has been argued that excessive population is the most outstanding threat to the
environment
of the globe. I totally agree with this
idea.
One of the main environment
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environmental
effect
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effects
that is
attributed to overpopulation is the growing
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growth
of
air pollution due to the overuse of transportation means. We are now living in Change preposition
apply
the
world with advanced technologies in transportation, which means modern Correct article usage
a
people
nowadays cannot live without traveling
by taking Change the spelling
travelling
airplane
, vehicles or ships. Fix the agreement mistake
airplanes
Such
transport tools generate a staggering volume of exhausted fumes on a daily basis and in turn have negative
impact on air quality. Correct article usage
a negative
Therefore
, if there are too many people
in this
world, the increasing demand for transportation will exacerbate this
problem considerably.
Another notable environmental issue that overpopulation will cause is the climbing accumulation of rubbish
, which causes damages
to both soil and ocean. Fix the agreement mistake
damage
Although
not all the products produced by human
are detrimental to the Fix the agreement mistake
humans
environment
, undoubtedly, people
nowadays still rely on chemical products like disinfectant
and materials which are non-biodegradable, Fix the agreement mistake
disinfectants
such
as some plastics bottle and bags. When such
chemical
and materials become Fix the agreement mistake
chemicals
rubbish
while people
are fail
to dispose of them appropriately, the soil would be eroded and the ocean would be severely polluted. Not to mention that many creatures living in oceans are dead because Change the verb form
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them
ate the plastic products Change the pronoun
they
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incidentally. Unfortunately, with the increase in population, the amount of Change preposition
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such
rubbish
would be increasingly produced and the environment
would be put at stake as the
result of Correct article usage
a
this
trend.
In conclusion, due to the impact of increasing exhausted fume and non-environment
-friendly rubbish
, it is totally reasonable to believe that overpopulation will become the top concern to the environment
. The governmental
should Replace the word
government
make
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take
actions
to curb the adverse impacts of Fix the agreement mistake
action
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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