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Overpopulation is the world's most serious environmental problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It has been argued that excessive population is the most outstanding threat to the
environment
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 of the globe. I totally agree with
this
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 idea. One of the main
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environment
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effect
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that is
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 attributed to overpopulation is the
growing
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of
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air pollution due to the overuse of transportation means. We are now living in
the
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 world with advanced technologies in transportation, which means modern
people
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 nowadays cannot live without
traveling
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travelling
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 by taking
airplane
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airplanes
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, vehicles or ships.
Such
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 transport tools generate a staggering volume of exhausted fumes on a daily basis and in turn have
negative
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 impact on air quality.
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, if there are too many
people
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 in
this
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 world, the increasing demand for transportation will exacerbate
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 problem considerably. Another notable environmental issue that overpopulation will cause is the climbing accumulation of
rubbish
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, which causes
damages
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 to both soil and ocean.
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 not all the products produced by
human
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humans
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 are detrimental to the
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, undoubtedly,
people
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 nowadays still rely on chemical products like
disinfectant
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disinfectants
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 and materials which are non-biodegradable,
such
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 as some plastics bottle and bags. When
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chemical
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chemicals
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 and materials become
rubbish
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 while
people
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are fail
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 to dispose of them appropriately, the soil would be eroded and the ocean would be severely polluted. Not to mention that many creatures living in oceans are dead because
them
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 ate the plastic products
by
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incidentally. Unfortunately, with the increase in population, the amount of
such
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rubbish
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 would be increasingly produced and the
environment
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 would be put at stake as
the
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 result of
this
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 trend. In conclusion, due to the impact of increasing exhausted fume and non-
environment
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-friendly
rubbish
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, it is totally reasonable to believe that overpopulation will become the top concern to the
environment
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. The
governmental
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government
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 should
make
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take
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actions
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action
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 to curb the adverse impacts of
climbing
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the climbing
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 population
to
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 the
environment
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 of our world.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exacerbating
  • finite resources
  • environmental degradation
  • biodiversity
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable consumption
  • habitat loss
  • family planning
  • renewable energy
  • technological advancements
  • resource management
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