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Band 7

Climate change is the biggest threat facing humanity today and in order to survive as a species we need to act now. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that climate change has become one of the main causes which is threatening the existence of human beings. The real action to overcome it is seriously needed to keep the sustainability.
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 and it is endangering the environment because it can make the ecosystem imbalance, which ultimately can create many disasters. We can see easily the symptoms of
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 destruction are already happening today,
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 as floods, forest burning, typhoons, and land sliding. If it cannot be handled as soon as possible, it can destroy our ecosystem and make the species vanish. One of the effective ways to prevent more destruction is by reducing the amount of CO2 in the atmosphere. It is because CO2 is the main cause of global warming. Since industrialization, the amount of CO2 in the atmosphere has been increasing
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. There are a number of ways to reduce the intensity of CO2,
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 as using electricity wisely, using public transportation, and using renewable energy
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 of fossil energy. By doing so, the global warming can be hindered. In conclusion, climate change is a serious problem that if it cannot be overcome properly, can vanish human life. By taking real action to prevent global warming right now, human life can be saved. Small actions
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 as swift the use of energy to the environmentally friendly one can keep the world to be sustained.

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Consider providing more specific examples or data to strengthen your arguments. For instance, you could reference scientific studies or reports that link specific disasters to climate change.
coherence and cohesion
To improve the flow of your essay, try using more cohesive devices (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in addition', 'however') when transitioning between your ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
Your essay has a clear position, stating that you agree with the statement about climate change being a significant threat, which is fundamental for task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of your essay is generally clear, with a logical progression of ideas and a defined introduction and conclusion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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