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All cars that burns fossil fuels should be banned and electric car should replace them. Do you agree or disagree

#cars #burns #fuels #car
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There is an opinion that automobiles powered by
electricity
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 should substitute gasoline using vehicles. As much as I agree with the idea of scrapping gasoline
cars
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 because it pollutes the environment, I
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 believe that electric
cars
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 are not the best option in some countries of the world.
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, when it comes to cost-effectiveness,
cars
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 that use fuels
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 as petrol, diesel and gas are cheaper.
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, during operation, a car that burns fossil fuels emits smoke which contains carbon dioxide and
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 due to the incomplete combustion that occurs while the engine is running.
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 when
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 substance is released into the atmosphere it causes pollution,
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 degrading the natural content of the environment .
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, the emission contributes to the depletion of the ozone layer which in turn causes increased UV radiation and
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 is detrimental to human health, causing diseases
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 as cataracts, some types of skin cancer etc.
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,
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 that operate with the usage of
electricity
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 are not an option to be considered in some countries where
electricity
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 is expensive, unstable or even not available.
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 some western parts of Africa like Nigeria. Few citizens of
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 country who are financially buoyant use
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-generating plants due to the instability of the power supply while others who cannot afford to have a generator solely depend on the unstable
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. In
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 case, it will be difficult to own an electric car when the means to recharge it is not certain. In conclusion, I think that both fossil fuels burning
cars
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 and electric
cars
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 can co-exist,
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, the consumption will
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 depend on the individual's financial capacity and
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 the country it is to be used.
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