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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary schools. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is considered that childhood is very fertile for learning.
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 specialists’ conviction is better to start educating
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 to a pupil while in primary
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 policies lead to
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, some other specialists claim that
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 should not give the burden of
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 to the
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. In
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 in primary
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. Many scholars assume that a child's mind is considered
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 tabularasha (blank sheet) where anything can be printed so quickly.
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, internalising
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 during the early age of human beings is
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 quite effective and quick.
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, I learned Magar
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 with my friend when I was in primary
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, which I haven’t forgotten yet. I learned many words and became able to communicate fast.
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, I personally recommend to the
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 to introduce a course
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 in primary
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, some other scholars of
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 opined against the policy
introducing
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primary schools. They claim
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 should be left free in the learning process during their initial
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 days. Giving
over burden
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 to the primary
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children
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providing
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by providing
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 so many materials may have detrimental impacts
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minds
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 since foreign
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 is not compulsory rather it is optional, they can make a choice when they are grown up.
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, overburdening may kill a pupil’s creativity.
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,
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policymakers
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policy makers
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policymakers
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 should be mindful while introducing curriculum. As their claim looks serious, it would be good to conduct more research in regard to the issue.
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, I recognize the opposite view of some scholars not to give more burden of teaching abroad
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 in primary
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. I firmly believe that we should tap the potential of
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 capacity of
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 during their early age so that learning would be very impactful throughout their life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Brain plasticity
  • Multicultural awareness
  • Curriculum
  • Globalization
  • Proficiency
  • Linguistic skills
  • Academic performance
  • Mother tongue
  • Bilingualism
  • Foreign language acquisition
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