Some people prefer the lifestyle and activities offered when living in a cold environment. Others prefer a hot environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays one of the widely discussed issues is many
people
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of life in
piping hot
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weather
conditions others choose living
living
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in cool climates. It is undeniable that
weather
has become an integral part of our life.
However
, there is no absolute agreement as some
people
find it
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beneficial , while others consider everything associated with it
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negatively
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. In
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I will examine both pros and cons of
this
controversial issue. There are many controversial issues related to
weather
. Many
people
enjoy summer activities. .the main reason for
this
is that if the
weather
is warm,
people
have enough energy and they can do their activities quickly and easily.
also
, according to scientific data, sunlight is important and beneficial for human health.
For example
, I like to work and teach in hot
weather
because I like it. I think most
of
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people
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like hot
weather
.The main reason for
this
is that some
people
are unable to work in the cold due to poor health
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On the other hand
, there are
persons
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who choose
cool
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a cool
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climate.They believe that if it's cold
weather
we will be fresher so they prefer working in cold
weather
and they are used to
such
conditions.Many
people
enjoy wearing winter clothes
such
as jackets. They like the snow that falls in winter. In conclusion, having weighed everything mentioned
up
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I can come to
a
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conclusion that
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I believe that activity in hot
weather
is better than in cold
weather
.Because working in hot
weather
is much easier and more comfortable than working in cold
weather
.
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