Today, some people think that universities should accept equal numbers of female and male in every subject. Others believe that this is an unacceptable policy. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, most
of
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people
argue about one of the most controversial issues that the numbers of male and female students should be equalized in every subject in university. Add an article
the people
However
, the majority of others completely unaccept the
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of the
policy
. In my opinion, this
policy
is not really suitable for reality and justice, and I do not recommend all of
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universities
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the universities
to
do that.
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First
of all, if universities execute publicly the policy
of equaling numbers of two genders, absolutely in theory it will brings
some advantages. In Change the verb form
bring
this
case, this
course will quickly motivate the
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a job
job
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jobs
For instance
, the
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also
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is also
is
increased, the rate of females getting Change the verb form
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this
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job
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job
also
inclines too. In addition
, the policy
will break social taboos. Because people normally believe that males
are not Correct your spelling
appropriate
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appropriate
to
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for
such
as accountant, the proportion of male accountants will limit these taboos.
On the other hand
, people believe that this
is unfair
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an unfair
policy
because of the unemplooyment
rate increase. Correct your spelling
unemployment
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males
want to become policemen, if the total target of this
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males
are
accepted, soo lots of these Correct pronoun usage
who are
males
will be unemployed. Therefore
, they have to choose another major they are not interested in. Obviously in
reality, Add the comma(s)
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policy
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those in theory. I Change preposition
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also
strongly disagree with that.
In conclusion, unversities
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universities
shoould
not accept Correct your spelling
should
equal
number of boys and girls in every subject, because it is not helpful to all Change the article
an equal
the equal
of
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students
in the future.Add an article
the students
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