Today, some people think that universities should accept equal numbers of female and male in every subject. Others believe that this is an unacceptable policy. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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people
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argue about one of the most controversial issues that the numbers of male and female students should be equalized in every subject in university.
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, the majority of others completely unaccept
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policy
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this
policy
is not really suitable for reality and justice, and I do not recommend all
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universities
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to
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do that.
First
of all, if universities execute publicly the
policy
of equaling numbers of two genders, absolutely in theory it will
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some advantages. In
this
case,
this
course will quickly motivate
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gender parity, and the result is both boys and girls have the same opportunities in getting
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after graduating.
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minority of females
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fond of choosing transportation, so if the input criteria
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increased, the rate of females getting
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job
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also
inclines too.
In addition
, the
policy
will break social taboos. Because people normally believe that
males
are not
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to
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a specific job
such
as accountant, the proportion of male accountants will limit these taboos.
On the other hand
, people believe that
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is
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policy
because of the
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unemployment
rate increase.
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of
males
want to become policemen, if the total target of
this
university is 1000 students, resembling
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only 500
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accepted, soo lots of these
males
will be unemployed.
Therefore
, they have to choose another major they are not interested in. Obviously
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reality,
this
policy
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significantly
to
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those in theory. I
also
strongly disagree with that. In conclusion,
unversities
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universities
shoould
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should
not accept
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number of boys and girls in every subject, because it is not helpful to all
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students
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in the future.
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