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In their advertising business nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think is a positive or negative development?

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This
 paper will discuss the premise in which several businesses want to highlight that their products are new through
the
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 publicity of them. In my opinion, it is a good marketing strategy to have good
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statistics
statisitcs
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statistics
of
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 the future.
To begin
 with, advertising is the most important way to sell a
product
,
this
 means that it has to stand out over other ones.
Therefore
, companies can promote sales and achieve
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mensual goals. Businesses
also
 study the culture of
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different countries, so they adjust the
product
 with the culture to emphasise it. Sometimes, when the
product
 is good and it is not necessary to change it, companies create new ads just to remind people why it is
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best
highlighting
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 it. The are several positive aspects in
this
 highlighting. The
first
 one is that the strategies behind the
product
 make sure that the information of it arrives to all ages.
This
 is nowadays seen on different platforms like TV, google adverts,
social
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 media apps, …
Secondly
, behind a
product
 there
is
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 always improvements
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 the development to make it better, even if we can not see it.
For example
, the new iPhone 14 looks
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 the previous one, iPhone 13.
Nevertheless
, there are software and material improvements
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hidden
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hidden
. But a professional or an advert can explain
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 you. To conclude, businesses try to exploit the
product
 to the fullest and
that is
 why they are going to use different plans to emphasise their
product
.
Besides
, thanks to the internet, there is more information where you can see if it is a new
product
 and
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 characteristics.
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