People continue to recommit crimes even after being penalized for their wrongdoings. Why do you think this happens? How can crimes be stopped?

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committing
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committing
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is horrible action.
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repeating
this
awful activity is rapidly
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increasing
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increasing
. Society
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about
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breaking
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breaking
laws about criminals.
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to undertake some strong punishments.
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reasonable
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purpose
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thief
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murder a people is not
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able to get jobs from employers. Prisoners after receiving freedom find
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to get a fair job because
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would
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realise
that misled people from
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path may steal
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and expensive items.
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today's
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practice majority
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human
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person
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unemployed
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particular thing must deserve money
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wrong
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way.
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solution of issue
to reduce
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breaking rules might be making
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number of facilities.
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, it would be unfair to deprive prisoners of getting a chance to
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unleash
their potential.
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ex prisoners
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are
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hostile
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human after all faults.
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